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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to seek your kind permission for the admission of my son to your school in grade eight. And the reason for asking this is that my whole family, including my son, will be moving into your town next June.

So, naturally, my son will not be able to continue in his old school. By the way, I have already learned a great deal about your school as to how it always sticks to its policies of maintaining a very high educational standard, and how it gets involved with the community members and parents so that they (community members and parents) can always keep an eye on their children.

And as for my son, he is a top-class student with a very keen mind for learning. Last year he scored 95% in his grade six final exams. Over the years, he has been an active member of a debate club in his school. On top of that, he also used to be a regular member of his school's football team.

So, based on my son’s credentials above, I would like to request you to grant my son admission into your school. Thank you in advance for your consideration.

Yours faithfully,

David Garfield

Direction: As if you are the principal of the school, read the letter and give a suitable response.


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precious02
Gửi lúc: 2021-03-16 22:54:04
Điểm: 8
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quynh_02
Gửi lúc: 2021-03-16 23:52:37
Điểm: 8
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TramAnhqs
Gửi lúc: 2021-03-12 17:13:39
Điểm: 3
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vht1996
Gửi lúc: 2021-03-13 17:29:54
Điểm: 3
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ngocanhmh
Gửi lúc: 2021-03-15 21:05:35
Điểm: 2
ĐĂNG PHẢN HỒI CỦA BẠN CHO BÀI HỌC NÀY
CÁC Ý KIẾN BÌNH LUẬN - PHẢN HỒI VỀ BÀI HỌC NÀY

quynh_02

Tiếng Anh cơ bản sơ cấp

Ngày tham gia: 08-12-2015

Bài viết: 1080

• Sổ học bạ: 684
• Điểm thành tích: 234
• Điểm học bạ: 684
Dear Mr. David Garfield, I am very glad that you have believed and chosen our school as the place for your son to attend at this school. Besides, thanks for your compliments about our school which makes us more motivated to meet expectations of the student’s parents in general and you in particular. In fact, our school has a long history, with excellent infrastructure and high-qualification teachers who love students with all their hearts. We always focus on our mission of educating students to become good citizens with the necessary knowledge. According to what you wrote in the previous letter, I highly appreciate the achievements your son has made at his old school. Therefore, I am writing this letter to notify you that I approve of your son attending our school. In fact, our school has an excellent reputation of training and education with lots of gifted students winning many prestigious awards from the whole provinces. Furthermore, our school's 10th grade pass rate for public schools is 98%. The strong point of our school is that teachers always encourage students' creativity to help them develop their full potential. In addition, we have elected a parents association with the aim of building a relationship with their parents and the parents association. In parallel with, our school has a lot of extracurricular activities. There are many sports and debate clubs. Our school has a big yard for the students to play football. Every year, our school participates in soccer championships with other schools and our school always wins a high prize. Thus, I am sure that this is a good environment for your son to satisfy his love for this King sport. Hence, I would like to invite you and your son to visit our school for admission. I only receive the admission record from August 1 to August 20. August 31 is your son's first day of school. He goes to school to participate in extracurricular activities and makes new friends and head teacher senior master. Once again, thank you for having interest in our school for your son’s education. I hope that the above information will help you to understand a deeper of our school. All the teachers and I are welcoming your son to study at our school. Kind regards, Helen Steinbeck
Gửi lúc: 23:52:37 ngày 16-03-2021
Điểm: 8/10
Time : 2021-03-18 09:22:01

Dear Mr. David Garfield,

I am very glad that you have believed and chosen our school as the place for your son to study (đã dùng ý chọn trường rồi nên không nhắc lại nữa) attend at this school. Besides, thanks for your compliments about our school which makes us more motivated to meet expectations of the student’s dùng sở hữu cách với danh từ số nhiều parents in general and you nên dùng ý nhà trường in particular. In fact, our school has a long history, with excellent infrastructure and high-qualification tính từ trước danh từ teachers who love students with all their hearts. We always focus on our mission of educating students to become good citizens with the necessary knowledge. According to what you wrote in the previous letter, I highly appreciate the achievements your son has made at his old school. Therefore, I am writing this letter to notify you that I approve of your son attending our school.

(In fact, our school has an excellent reputation of training and education with lots of gifted students winning many prestigious awards from the whole provinces. Furthermore, our school's 10th grade pass rate for public schools is 98%. The strong point of our school is that teachers always encourage students' creativity to help them develop their full potential. In addition, we have elected a parents association with the aim of building a relationship with their parents and the parents association.) thông tin về vấn đề nhà trường,bạn đã chỉ cần nói chung như ở đoạn trên rồi , đoạn này không cần thiết nữa

In parallel with với vấn đề gì? sau with chưa có danh từ, our school has a lot of extracurricular activities. There are many sports and debate clubs. Our school has a big yard for the students to play football. Every year, our school participates in soccer championships with other schools and our school always wins a high prize. Thus, I am sure that this is a good environment for your son to satisfy his love for this King sport.

Hence, I would like to invite you and your son to visit our school for admission. I only receive the admission record from August 1 to August 20. August 31 is your son's first day of school. He goes to school to participate in extracurricular activities and makes dùng to V chỉ mục đích new friends and head teacher senior master.

Once again, thank you for having interest in our school for your son’s education. I hope that the above information will help you to understand a deeper dùng danh từ sau a of our school. All the teachers and I are welcoming your son to study at our school.

Kind regards,
Helen Steinbeck

Nhì chung, bạn triển khai hướng giải quyết vấn đề khá tốt, các ý rõ ràng. Tuy nhiên, có 1 số ý bạn có thể lược bỏ bớt để bài viết cô đọng tập trung ý chính hơn.

precious02

Tiếng Anh cơ bản sơ cấp

Ngày tham gia: 28-09-2014

Bài viết: 808

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• Điểm thành tích: 410
• Điểm học bạ: 570
Dear Mr. David Garfield, I am very glad to receive your letter and know that you want your son to attend our school. To be honest, after reading your letter, I am deeply impressed by his achievement at the present school. Therefore, I am happy to announce that your son is accepted to study at our school. In fact, our school is a very renowned school in this town. The quality of our education is given top priority with a team of highly qualified dedicated and responsible teachers. Thanks to the teachers' devotion and the students' efforts, our school has achieved good results in every field. In addition, the school focuses on promoting comprehensive development for the pupils, in which, pupils not only learn in the class but also participate in sport and debate club. At the weekends, our school has a friendly football session between high schools to help pupils learn and interact with each other. Furthermore, currently, our school has a well-trained and skillful football team who has often brought our school some gold and silver medals in competitions. Therefore, this is a good chance in order that your son can take part in the football team if he wants. In addition, I would like to inform you of our school's opening schedule. Our school will start the new school year in early September, so the application process will implement in the middle of August. Finally, I do hope to discuss further issue when you and your son will come to visit our school. I strongly believe that our school will be the right starting platform for your son to develop his potential and build a bright career. Best regards, Susan James The principal of the school
Gửi lúc: 22:54:04 ngày 16-03-2021
Điểm: 8/10
Time : 2021-03-18 09:26:13

Dear Mr. David Garfield,

I am very glad to receive your letter and know that you want your son to attend our school. To be honest, after reading your letter, I am deeply impressed by his achievement at the present school. Therefore, I am happy to announce that your son is accepted to study at our school.

nên có ý phản hồi trước: cám ơn những lời đánh giá cao trường của bạn và chọn trường của bạn cho con anh ấy học tập In fact, our school is a very renowned school in this town. The quality of our education is given top priority with a team of highly qualified dedicated and responsible teachers. Thanks to the teachers' devotion and the students' efforts, our school has achieved good results in every field. In addition, the school focuses on promoting comprehensive development for the pupils, in which, pupils not only learn in the class but also participate in sport and debate club. At the weekends, our school has a friendly football session between high schools to help pupils learn and interact with each other. Furthermore, currently, our school has a well-trained and skillful football team who has often brought our school some gold and silver medals in competitions. Therefore, this is a good chance in order that your son can take part in the football team if he wants. In addition, I would like to inform you of our school's opening schedule. Our school will start the new school year in early September, so the application process will implement in the middle of August.

Finally, I do hope to discuss further issue when you and your son will come to visit our school. I strongly believe that our school will be the right starting platform for your son to develop his potential and build a bright career.

Best regards,
Susan James
The principal of the school

Bài viết của bạn viết phản hồi thư xin chuyển trường cho con trai khá tốt, các ý rõ ràng. Bạn chỉ cần thêm ý dẫn dắt nội dung phản hồi như gợi ý để bài viết hoàn thiện hơn.

Điểm: 8.5

monobooboos

Tiếng Anh cơ bản sơ cấp

Ngày tham gia: 23-08-2016

Bài viết: 20

• Sổ học bạ: 49
• Điểm thành tích: 0
• Điểm học bạ: 49
Dear Mr.David Garfield. I am really glad to see your letter. Firstly, our school is a top-class education for childrent with so many teachers have experience and modern equipment. A half of teachers have more than 10 years experience who obtain awards about education in the country. In lastest month, We just enhance 3 experiment room and 2 music room for talent student. Secondly. In next course, Our school still have a lot of empty places because we build to add 1 building incule 8 class for 160 student plus.As I was take a look your letter, your grant son is good looking at score and active e xtracurricular studend. These point is so important whether student suit our school. Finally, If you have chance, you take your son to our school early to acquainted with new friend and environment. Your sincerely. Best regards
Gửi lúc: 21:46:51 ngày 16-03-2021
Điểm: 2/10
Time : 2021-03-17 20:30:52

Dear Mr.David Garfield,.
I am really glad to see your letter. Firstly, our school is a top-class education dùng danh từ miêu tả không chính xác for childrent chính tả with so many teachers who (dùng mệnh đề quan hệ) have experience and modern equipment của nhà trường chứ không phải của giáo viên. A half of teachers have more than 10 years experience who obtain awards about education in the country. In lastest month, Recently, We have just enhanced 3 experiment rooms and 2 music rooms for talent students. nội dung này không phù hợp nội dung phản hồi
Secondly. In next course, Our school still have a lot of empty places because we build to add 1 building incule 8 class for 160 student plus diễn đạt lại để làm rõ ý.As I was take a look your letter, your grant son is good looking at score and active e xtracurricular studend. These point is so important whether student suit our school.
Finally, If you have chance, you take your son to our school early to acquainted with new friend and environment. nên chú ý diễn đạt và chọn lọc ý

Your sincerely,.
Best regards

Bạn viết bài chưa đúng trọng tâm phản hồi, diễn đạt không rõ ràng. Chú ý luyện viết nhiều hơn nhé. Bạn cần viết thư tới David Garfield với cương vị là hiệu trưởng của trường để phản hồi thư xin học cho con anh ấy như sau:

- Cám ơn David Garfield vì đã đánh giá cao trường của bạn và chọn trường của bạn cho con anh ấy học tập

- Khẳng định chính sách của trường:

+ Chất lượng, chuẩn mực đào tạo cao

+ Luôn phối hợp với gia đình và xã hội để giáo dục học sinh

- Đánh giá thành tích học tập cũng như kĩ năng, sự tham gia các hoạt động của nhà trường của con David Garfield

- Thông cảm với nguyên nhân David Garfield xin cho con học ở trường của bạn vì gia đình anh ấy chuyển chỗ ở

- Chấp nhận cho con anh ấy vào học lớp 8 của trường

 

ngocanhmh

Tiếng Anh cơ bản sơ cấp

Ngày tham gia: 14-09-2020

Bài viết: 39

• Sổ học bạ: 160
• Điểm thành tích: 33
• Điểm học bạ: 160
Dear David Garfield, I have read your mail. Thank you for your research and would like to enroll your son in my school. As you know, my school always complies with the education law to help students have the best learning environment. In your last letter, I also know something about your son. It is respectable and has a very high spirit of learning. I will agree to admit him to school and hope to have a solidarity and a positive spirit in learning and training. Anh.
Gửi lúc: 21:05:35 ngày 15-03-2021
Điểm: 2/10
Time : 2021-03-17 20:57:09

Dear David Garfield,
I have read your mail dùng mệnh đề quan hệ  để nói về nội dung chính của thư. Thank you for your research and would like to enroll your son in my school. As you know, my school always complies with the education law? to help students have the best learning environment.
In your last letter, I also know something about your son. It is respectable and has a very high spirit of learning. I will agree to admit him to school and hope to have a solidarity and a positive spirit in learning and training.cấu trúc câu và diễn đạt
Anh.

Closing?

Signature?

Bạn chưa hoàn thiện cấu trúc thư cũng như nội dung thư. Bạn cần viết thư tới David Garfield với cương vị là hiệu trưởng của trường để phản hồi thư xin học cho con anh ấy như sau:

Opening: Dear David Garfield,

Body:

- Cám ơn David Garfield vì đã đánh giá cao trường của bạn và chọn trường của bạn cho con anh ấy học tập

- Khẳng định chính sách của trường:

+ Chất lượng, chuẩn mực đào tạo cao

+ Luôn phối hợp với gia đình và xã hội để giáo dục học sinh

- Đánh giá thành tích học tập cũng như kĩ năng, sự tham gia các hoạt động của nhà trường của con David Garfield

- Thông cảm với nguyên nhân David Garfield xin cho con học ở trường của bạn vì gia đình anh ấy chuyển chỗ ở

- Chấp nhận cho con anh ấy vào học lớp 8 của trường

Closing: Yours Sincerely,

Signature

What's a nice day!

trangchinguyen

Tiếng Anh cơ bản sơ cấp

Ngày tham gia: 12-10-2019

Bài viết: 16

• Sổ học bạ: 109
• Điểm thành tích: 0
• Điểm học bạ: 109
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to seek your kind permission for the admission of my son in your school in grade eight. And the reason for asking this is that my whole family, including my son, will be moving into your town next June. So, naturally, my son will not be able to continue in his old school. By the way, I have already learned a great deal about your school as to how it always sticks to its policies of maintaining a very high educational standard, and how it gets involved with the community members and parents so that they (community members and parents) can always keep an eye on their children. And as for my son, he is a top-class student with a very keen mind for learning. Last year he scored 95% in his grade six final exams. Over the years, he has been an active member of a debate club in his school. On top of that, he also used to be a regular member of his school's football team. So, based on my son’s credentials above, I would like to request you to grant my son an admission into your school. Thank you in advance for your consideration. Yours faithfully, David Garfield
Gửi lúc: 20:45:25 ngày 15-03-2021
Điểm: 0/10
Time : 2021-03-17 20:03:01

Bạn cần viết thư tới David Garfield với cương vị là hiệu trưởng của trường để phản hồi thư xin học cho con anh ấy như sau:

Opening: Dear David Garfield,

Body:

- Cám ơn David Garfield vì đã đánh giá cao trường của bạn và chọn trường của bạn cho con anh ấy học tập

- Khẳng định chính sách của trường:

+ Chất lượng, chuẩn mực đào tạo cao

+ Luôn phối hợp với gia đình và xã hội để giáo dục học sinh

- Đánh giá thành tích học tập cũng như kĩ năng, sự tham gia các hoạt động của nhà trường của con David Garfield

- Thông cảm với nguyên nhân David Garfield xin cho con học ở trường của bạn vì gia đình anh ấy chuyển chỗ ở

- Chấp nhận cho con anh ấy vào học lớp 8 của trường

Closing: Yours Sincerely,

Signature

my friend too
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