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Some people think that dangerous extreme sports such as rock climbing and sky-diving should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?


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hoatlinh123

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Ngày tham gia: 04-07-2017

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First, the sports are very dangerous and if you accidentally encounter an accident, it is very dangerous to your life. Second, these sports need to have a lot of experience, good body, survivability as well as spare equipment if you accidentally get lost. If you do not have that knowledge, you will probably encounter many difficulties. On the other hand, we can participate in these activities to increase resistance and exercise for good health, we can explore and learn a lot of new things so the remaining 40% I disagree with this view.
Gửi lúc: 22:50:14 ngày 09-03-2021
Điểm: 0/10
Time : 2021-03-19 15:35:58

First, the sports are very dangerous and if you accidentally encounter an accident, it is very dangerous to your life. Second, these sports need to have are for people with a lot of experience, good body, survivability as well as spare equipment if you accidentally get lost. If you do not have that knowledge, you will probably encounter many difficulties. On the other hand, we can participate in these activities to increase resistance and exercise for good health, we can explore and learn a lot of new things so the remaining 40% I disagree with this view.?

Bạn cần viết bài rõ ràng hơn, không copy bài viết của người khác. Bạn cần viết 1 bài essay có bố cục 3 phần như sau:

– Introduction : Đưa ra chủ đề cho bài luận và nêu lý do tại sao người đọc nên quan tâm đến chủ đề của bạn

– Body: Triển khai phân tích và đưa ra những lý luận, dẫn chứng chứng minh. Thông thường phần body nên viết 2 đoạn:

+ Body 1:Ý chính --> supporting idea --> ví dụ, dẫn chứng chứng minh

+ Body 1:Ý chính --> supporting idea --> ví dụ, dẫn chứng chứng minh

- Conclusion: Đưa ra tóm tắt ngắn gọn, đề cập lại ý kiến quan điểm cá nhân

Thùy Linh

zirler

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In my opinion, I agree with this point of about 60%. First, the sports are very dangerous and if you accidentally encounter an accident, it is very dangerous to your life. Second, these sports need to have a lot of experience, good body, survivability as well as spare equipment if you accidentally get lost. If you do not have that knowledge, you will probably encounter many difficulties. On the other hand, we can participate in these activities to increase resistance and exercise for good health, we can explore and learn a lot of new things so the remaining 40% I disagree with this view.
Gửi lúc: 22:36:06 ngày 09-03-2021
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Time : 2021-03-19 15:36:49

In my opinion, I agree with this point of about 60%.không dùng cách này để diễn đạt quan điểm đồng ý
First, the sports are very dangerous and if you accidentally encounter an accident, it is very dangerous to your life. Second, these sports need to have are for people with a lot of experience, good body, survivability as well as spare equipment if you accidentally get lost. If you do not have that knowledge, you will probably encounter many difficulties. On the other hand, we can participate in these activities to increase resistance and exercise for good health, we can explore and learn a lot of new things so the remaining 40% I disagree with this view.?

Bạn cần viết bài rõ ràng hơn, không copy bài viết của người khác. Bạn cần viết 1 bài essay có bố cục 3 phần như sau:

– Introduction : Đưa ra chủ đề cho bài luận và nêu lý do tại sao người đọc nên quan tâm đến chủ đề của bạn

– Body: Triển khai phân tích và đưa ra những lý luận, dẫn chứng chứng minh. Thông thường phần body nên viết 2 đoạn:

+ Body 1:Ý chính --> supporting idea --> ví dụ, dẫn chứng chứng minh

+ Body 1:Ý chính --> supporting idea --> ví dụ, dẫn chứng chứng minh

- Conclusion: Đưa ra tóm tắt ngắn gọn, đề cập lại ý kiến quan điểm cá nhân

 

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linhblx2018

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Some people would argue the dangerous extreme sports such as rock climbing and sky-diving lead to many serious accidents. I completely disagree with this view because I think the prohibit for extreme sport is not the best way to reduce accidents in sport, even normal sports could be lead to injury. In my opinion, the people should follow the instruction and be training before participate any dangerous sport. Moreover, the organized company equipped with modern safety devices and they must responsible for maintain in term. The people who are take part in these extreme sports should go with a group of people to support and get experiences from professional person and avoid to do extreme sport alone. Nowadays, there are many dangerous sports but the people like extreme dangerous sports increasingly. They want to free and challenge with interesting sports like parkour, rock climbing and sky-diving… I think if the government banned, it may be lead big protest
Gửi lúc: 22:26:49 ngày 09-03-2021
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Time : 2021-03-21 20:54:43

Some people would argue the dangerous extreme sports such as rock climbing and sky-diving lead to many serious accidents. I completely disagree with this view because I think the prohibit for extreme sports is not the best way to reduce accidents in sport, even normal sports could be lead to injury.chưa phải chủ đề của bài luận theo yêu cầu đề bài
In my opinion, the people should follow the instruction and be training dùng từ không đúng before participate dùng Ving sau giới từ any dangerous sport. Moreover, the organized company equipped with modern safety devices câu fragment and they must be (thiếu động từ) responsible for maintaining Ving sau giới từ in term. The people who are take part in these extreme sports should go with a group of people to support and get experiences from professional person and avoid to do Ving sau avoid extreme sport alone.
Nowadays, there are many dangerous sports but the number of people who like extreme dangerous sports increases increasingly. They want to be free and challenge with interesting sports like parkour, rock climbing and sky-diving… I think if the government banned, it may be lead big protest quan điểm chứ không phải điều kiện

Bạn viết bài chưa đáp ứng yêu cầu của 1 bài luận, các ý viết word by word, chưa thể hiện được chủ điểm cũng như lập luận của bài. Bạn nên cố gắng luyện viết nhiều hơn.


Xuanmai317

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Many people acknowledge that their lifes will surely be humdrum if they lack sports because they are in their blood. Therefore, they do not hesitate doing any things including risky sports at all costs to satisfy their vehement passion. Besides some up sides, this brings about loads of down sides, which makes people opine that so-called soprts such as mountain climbing and sky diving should be prohibited. For my money, I absolutely oppose this viewpoint. On the one hand, some schools of thoughts believe that doing dangerous sports will invole elements of risks bereaving of their life. To illustrate, we cannot forget Russia’s Dyatlov Pass Incident happened in 1959 that cause horrific death to nine thickly-experienced climbers just in one night but scientists have ever found out the reasons up to now. On the other hand, that the government prevent people from doing dangerous sports is disagreed for some following reaons. First and foremost, this violates their freedom and democracy because they cannot gauge their true potentials, break the records and have brillian & breathtaking performances. Actually, everyone on the Earth is thirst for being well – known and appreciated as they have resplendernt accomplishments. Hence, forcing the world of sports not to do threatening games is a big barrier with them. Moreover, risk – takers are aware of the possible harzards and undergo an extreme trainning as well as ensure enough safety equipment so the situation they are put in jeopardy is pretty rare. To go in detail, before experiencing rock climbing, they practice a lot of technique such as using backpacks and mountaineering sticks, practicing endurance and spirit, etc. In a nutshell, although doing dangerous sports poses a big threat to someone’s life, we cannot forbid them quit their passion. Risk – takers should ensure their security by following all precautions and useful tools so that they are not likely to be got severely injured and killed.
Gửi lúc: 22:23:33 ngày 09-03-2021
Điểm: 6/10
Time : 2021-03-22 09:18:57

Many people acknowledge that their lifes lives will surely be humdrum if they lack sports because they are in their blood diễn đạt thái quá. Therefore, they do not hesitate doing any things including risky sports at all costs to satisfy their vehement passion. Besides some up sides, this brings about loads of down sides, which makes people opine that so-called extreme soprts chính tả such as mountain climbing and sky diving should be prohibited. For my money, I absolutely oppose this viewpoint.
On the one hand, some schools of thoughts believe that doing dangerous sports will invole chính tả elements of risks bereaving of their life danh từ số nhiều. To illustrate, we cannot forget Russia’s Dyatlov Pass Incident happened in 1959 that cause horrific death to nine thickly-experienced climbers just in one night but scientists have ever found out the reasons up to now. dẫn chứng này không support chủ điểm của bạn ở trên
On the other hand, that the government prevent people from doing dangerous sports is disagreed nội động từ không dùng thể bị động for some following reaons. First and foremost, this violates their freedom and democracy because they cannot gauge their true potentials, break the records and have brillian & breathtaking performances. Actually, everyone on the Earth is thirst for being well – known thông tin này không chính xác and appreciated as they have resplendernt accomplishments. Hence, forcing the world of sports not to do threatening dangerous games is a big barrier with them. Moreover, risk – takers are aware of the possible harzards and undergo an extreme trainning as well as ensure enough safety equipment, so the situation they are put in jeopardy is pretty rare. To go in detail, before experiencing rock climbing, they practice a lot of technique such as using backpacks and mountaineering sticks, practicing endurance and spirit, etc.
In a nutshell, although doing dangerous sports poses a big threat to someone’s life, we cannot forbid them to quit their passion. Risk – takers should ensure their security by following all precautions and useful tools so that they are not likely to be got chủ động severely injured and killed.

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huyentrangtt123

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Nowadays, with the worldwide name development trends in all fields, so too, sports and games evolve along. Many amusement parks were opened to serve the entertainment needs of the people, especially for children. But in addition to sports, the game bearing the imprint of "tradition" that all children love are sports, adventure games, making people "heartbreak" of young people. Since these games and sports appeared there has been a lot of opinions from netizens, both on the opposite side and in the opposite direction. Some people think dangerous games should be banned, some people think they should challenge themselves with these games, so that they can train themselves and have a new way of seeing life, more optimistic. I think that while these games are very dangerous, they should not be banned completely, then people who want to challenge themselves will not be able to experience new things anymore, tired and stressed people will not be able to look back on their lives in a new positive direction that they have never seen again.For example, when you feel upset, you can skydive to experience, to see the life, live in a more positive way from the clear blue sky. Everything has two sides: the good side and the bad side, so dangerous games have received good opinions and support, but also received mixed opinions from netizens. But we should still respect the interests, passions and opinions of everyone. Although sports and games are dangerous, they also play a quite important role in life, they can help us. Becoming stronger and more resilient, but still should be in moderation, it should not hurt me or get involved, cause everyone I love to worry about. Thank you for reading my opinion about the topic 488!I hope to be able to get more advice and guidance from the teachers! Thank you so much!
Gửi lúc: 22:41:34 ngày 09-03-2021
Điểm: 4/10
Time : 2021-03-22 09:30:42

Nowadays, with the worldwide name development trends in all fields, so too, sports and games evolve along. Many amusement parks were opened dùng thì hiện tại đơn để miêu tả to serve the entertainment needs of the people, especially for children. But in addition to sports, the game bearing the imprint of "tradition" that all children love are sports, adventure games, making people "heartbreak" of young people chú ý tương quan từ loại khi liệt kê nhé. Since these games and sports appeared dùng hiện tại đơn there has been have been (chia động từ với danh từ số nhiều) a lot of opinions from netizens, both on the opposite side and in the opposite direction.dùng cụm danh từ chứ không dùng cụm giới từ
Some people think dangerous games should be banned, thiếu sự chuyển ý, bạn nên tách ý vì 2 ý đối lập nhau some people think they should challenge themselves with these games, so that they can train themselves and have a new way of seeing life, more optimistic chú ý diễn đạt ý và tương quan khi dùng and. I think that while though (dùng mệnh đề nhượng bộ) these games are very dangerous, they should not be banned completely, tách ý để tránh câu run-on then people who want to challenge themselves will not be able to experience new things anymore, tired and stressed people will not be able to look back on their lives in a new positive direction that they have never seen again.For example, when you feel upset, you can skydive to experience, to see the life, live in a more positive way from the clear blue sky.đây không phải ví dụ mà là lập luận
Everything has two sides: the good side and the bad side, so dangerous games have received good opinions and support diễn đạt word by word, but also received mixed opinions from netizens không có not only thì không dùng but also. But we should still respect the interests, passions and opinions of everyone. Although sports and games are dangerous, they also play a quite important role in life, they can help us. Becoming stronger and more resilient, but still should be in moderation, it should not hurt me or get involved, cause everyone I love to worry about.diễn đạt word by word, và dùng đối tượng me/ I là không chính xác. Bạn nên dùng con người nói chung

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